nikolas
July 23, 2025 at 1:41:53 AM
hi there, im from the Melonland forums. Just recently, when I was asking how to open an OBB file, I figured it out by just searching it up and being patient, and while your writing isn't typically the kind of stuff I read, I still enjoyed it. It was very unique for what it is and if I could give any constructive criticism, then I would say to not write your characters to tell and explain, allow the reader to use the context clues that are already available in the text or in other words it doesn't make sense for the text to explain that the crystal's are needed to protect against sunlight and weakness twice especially since you had a character explain it to another character that should realistically have know that already if you would like to have characters explain things about the story to other characters then just make it something that one or both of the characters wouldn't have know or make it something they would complain about also monologing works too but it may come off the wrong way at times and seem like a narrator is talking or something similar other than that everything else is nice it has a lot of heart to it and the characters are very cute and don't worry about what the person below me said you just need to flesh out the lore a lot more and add some filler in between the conflict it's and unfinished story right? I would love to see the rest of it!